I need this paper edited as I haven′t included enough evidence for certain state

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I need this paper edited as I haven′t included enough evidence for certain statements. I think British English spelling should also done instead of American. I have added red text to where my professor has given me comments. Here is the feedback I received :
The strengths of your work are:
· The topic you explored is an interesting one for Early Years teaching and has implications for professional practice which have been somewhat explored (LO2).
· There is some consideration of the pedagogical approaches involved to your topic and how this links to learning though it would benefit from greater criticality and detail (LO4).
· You demonstrate an understanding of the relevant research practices and considerations for practitioner inquiry though would have benefitted with reference to the key literature offered via the module.
The areas for development are:
· The assignment is over the word count plus the 10% at 4551, this could have been reduced with careful editing to avoid repetitious sections and points.
· As with your previous work, your writing does need more development to avoid short sentences with bold statements. Instead, you need to join your sentences to create a better flow or argumentation and remember to check if you have backed up your statements with reasoning or literature evidence. This occurs throughout the assignment.
· There is no exploration of HQTL in general or within the context of your question (LO4) nor a reflection on the learning environment (LO3).
· Although the qualitative quotes are comprehensive, they can be utilised more effectively to illustrate different aspects of your key findings. At present, they are large and encompass many different elements and the work would benefit from a more careful analysis and presentation of the different aspects of the responses linked directly to theory.
· The literature review lacks some references or clear links as to where the ideas are being drawn from which is also mirrored in the discussion section which makes little or no links between theory and practice. There is a lack of evidence for conclusions throughout. British expert needed

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